Letter Response

In this forum, students who asked questions will get responses from the story in the Handout. Students in this forum will respond to questions asked by students and impersonate as the person in the story. For other responses from other students, see the comments section of this post.
Here is your contribution to the forum: Letter to Tadashi Tei
Dear Tadashi,
Funny that you should ask about the government. I have to admit, the government is very cruel. So yes, I dislike their behavior. They came on various transportation: by car, by tanks, by horse, by camel, and on foot. There were so many casualties in the village. The militia group additionally burned our houses, and stole our food. We had nothing to survive the threat. Fortunately, I escaped - the battle was so terrible. Some girls and women were kidnapped; some were never seen again.
To answer your second question, the government-linked militia group attacked our village for food, our livestock, and our properties. Not only that, but the reason they attacked us is to terrify us. Maybe, they should also attack us to recruit more people in their army, acquire materials and weapons, and to expand their territory.
Finally, the relationship between our village and government, you ask, I believe that they are hostile. They just want to obtain more items for weapons, more food, and recruit more people into their army. They additionally wanted to terrorize us. The reason why they attack our village, I think I explained that before. It is just that I don't understand the government very much and they shouldn't attack any village at all. They should spend their taxes (In fact, the government has money, so why not spend them?) for the food, the weapons, and to recruit people into the army.
Thank you for asking Tadashi, this is what I believe.
Sincerely,
Mohammed

Summary of Food Security Article One

This is a forum for discussion. You can see the other students' paragraph. You may compliment and criticize their paragraph. This is where you summarize the Food Security article. My paragraph is as shown below.
My article is from the World Food Programme; the programme is inviting students and people who want to be a film maker to create a video about world hunger through the international video competition, called "Hunger Bytes". According to Drew Barrymore, Ambassador Against Hunger, states that "Creativity and a desire to benefit the material, social, and spiritual welfare of humanity are a powerful combination to add in the video."

How Food Shapes our Cities

Write in a short paragraph explaining the video saw from Carolyn Steel and mention three pieces of evidence you collected from the video. Imagine you have one minute to explain the video.
My paragraph is as shown below.
In Carolyn Steel's introduction to the presentation, she first stated a question, "How do we feed a city?" She then states a that this is a question that is it occasionally asked. The video is basically about where food comes from, for instance, just like meat and chicken coming in from the north to London, from Scotland and Wales. (Carolyn states that animals enter the city) I have collected pieces of evidence from the video that there are approximately 7 billion carnivores (people) in the world. As plenty of meat is consumed, 19 million hectares of forest is destroyed each year, and 20 million hectares of existing arable is degraded. In addition, 1/2 of food produced in the U.S. is discarded. Carolyn also uses connections with different languages like "utopia for good place or no place" and "sitopia for food place". She believes that the world is a sitopia because we have plenty of food to produce and it is sufficient to feed the whole world, but the food is unequally distributed. In the slide that Carolyn used for what sitopia looks like looks very foundational because a food place shows a place that has food, whether cooking in a residence, in a restaurant, etc. Therefore I repeat what the the presentation is about like in the introduction, Carolyn talks about answering the question, "Where does food come from?" given with facts and statistics.

Smoking Topic; Biased and Unbiased Sentences

Biased Sentences = Red
Unbiased Sentences = Blue
Smoking is the most disgusting, horrible, unhealthy way of showing off yourself into coolness. Smoking cigarettes/cigars have tobacco in them. According to Wikipedia, tobacco smoking may cause lung cancer, heart disease, emphysema, and chronic obstructive pulmonary disease. According to the CDC (Centers for Disease Control; an agency in the United States), it is told that 440,000 people in US die every year by smoking. According to the World Health Organization, it estimates that tobacco killed 5.4 million people in 2004, and 100 million deaths in the 20th century. People are foolish and unaware of people who do not want to smoke. They just think it is cool and think that they find it in the popularity side, rather than the healthy side. Smoking should be prohibited everywhere and should never be used in the world.

School Uniforms, Summative Assessment Practice

Red = Topic Sentence/Main Idea
Blue = Examples
Green = Opinion
School uniforms have to be the grossest form of torture that schools inflict on kids. Do any teachers know how uncomfortable school uniforms are? AND how selfish it is that kids can’t show their own fashion sense freely instead of wearing someone else’s stupid and warped idea of what is fashion! I’m ashamed to wear my uniform anywhere except at school and even at school I feel humiliated-the only thing that makes it acceptable is that every other student has to wear the stupid clothes. Personally, I think I can choose my own clothes and should be trusted to do that. When I was allowed to choose my own clothes to wear to school, I felt a lot better. Now wearing a gross, boring and uninteresting uniform day in and day out, makes me feel like I should change schools. School kids should never have to wear uniforms.
Topic Sentence/Main Idea: School uniforms have to be the grossest form of torture that schools inflict on kids. (the author shows biased words such as grossest, torture, inflict)
Example 1: Do any teachers know how uncomfortable school uniforms are? AND how selfish it is that kids cannot show their own fashion sense freely instead of wearing someone else's stupid and warped idea of what is fashion! (the capitalized AND shows bias)
Evidence 1: There is no evidence. What clothes does it have to be to be in fashion? How can uniforms be not fashionable? How can teachers know how uncomfortable school uniforms are? Who is the someone else? You need do describe the uniform's color, and other specific details about the uniform.
Example 2: I’m ashamed to wear my uniform anywhere except at school and even at school I feel humiliated; the only thing that makes it acceptable is that every other student has to wear the stupid clothes.
Evidence 2: Once again, there is no evidence. Why is the author ashamed of wearing his/her uniform? Again, what is the uniform's color? Appearance? Material? You must describe what the uniform is.
Example 3: Now wearing a gross, boring and uninteresting uniform day in and day out, makes me feel like I should change schools. (biased; the author feels he/she should change schools if he/she wears a uniform.)
Evidence 3: THERE IS NO EVIDENCE! Why do you think uniforms are not fashionable? Why are uniforms boring and uninteresting? We do not know the appearance of the uniform; the author did not describe anything about it.

Why do Most Women Suffer in Poverty?

Why do most women suffer in poverty?
Women in poverty is very excruciating and agonizing. The first reason is that women are suffering in poverty is possibly that they have to stay in home, take care of children; or, maybe women are too sick to obtain a job. Many jobs in are unavailable for women. Unskilled women have joined the work force than ever before. The second reason is that women are unable to receive education and are illiterate. Well, according to the UNICEF program, the adult literacy percentage rate for women in the world is 66. The least developed countries for females have a literacy percentage rate of 38. This is the reason that females are incapable to obtain a job. Again, the reason for this are that the females must take care of their children or possibly they are suffering in extreme illness. Although, there are more women than men in secondary school enrollment in Latin America and the Caribbean. The ratio of males for secondary school enrollment is 52 and the ratio of females for secondary school enrollment is 56.
The solution to this problem is that the government use their taxes for public schools, especially for women. Women should be free of charge, while men are charged. The government may hire teachers who are qualified of literacy to teach the women who are illiterate. Another solution to eliminate the problem of fatigue and sickness is to open a clinic, mainly for women. The effects of this will have less women suffer in poverty. It is totally unfair for plenty of women to be suffering in poverty. Women should be successful like men.
Topic Sentence/Main Idea: Women in poverty is very excrutiating and agonizing.
Examples: Women barely received any education and unable to work.
Evidence: Literacy percentage rates for women in the world is 66%.
Loaded Words that are biased: excrutiating, agonizing, unfair

Poverty is a Serious Problem in the USA

Poverty is totally a serious problem in USA. According to my mom, there are some people in USA who live below the poverty line. There are some homeless people in New York, and a few in Florida. There should not be any people in United States living in poverty, because the US is a prosperous country. According to the encyclopedia, World Book 2000, The government classifies that approximately 14% of the population is poor. Some groups of Americans have poverty rates that have exceed that of the general population. These groups include Hispanic Americans and African Americans. Some families with lower than the average poverty rates include the elderly and two percent families. Most families can raise their incomes and can escape from poverty within a few years. However, many of the Americans who are poor are in the position of extreme poverty, lasting for a decade, or even greater. Many of these people in America, like my mother stated, are homeless, especially in New York. Poverty in the US has a variety of causes. One major causes can be that steady, well-paying jobs can be difficult to find and keep. Another causes can be that the people especially girls and women in the US, lack the education or skills needed for such jobs. Finally, there are others who cannot find jobs because they are too ill to work. Therefore, the government of America, brawls poverty using three ammunition. One, measures to improve job opportunities. Two, educational programs and three, social welfare programs.
Main Idea/Topic Sentence: Poverty is totally a serious problem in US.
Example: According to my mother, some people in the US are living under the poverty line.
Evidence: The US government classifies that approximately 14% of the population is poor.